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I love your background as well. It's very soft and lovely without taking away focus from the main subjects. However, the reflections are inconsistent, as I believe someone else mentioned...it looks more like glass than water in front, versus how water would ripple. That's another thing--ripple. Water looks like she is moving, or has just finished taking a step, so there would be some movement in the water around her. The ripples/reflections from the leaves come off as awkward to me, more pasted on than sitting on top of the water.
Adore the folds in the clothing! The detail you put into the tree is also quite nice. The only other thing I have to say is about Water's hair. I believe this was also touched on, but I wanted to give you my input on it as well. I love it up until the point where it begins to flow, as it were. It's too rigid, and looks like it's sticking directly out from her shoulders whereas water would be much smoother and frothier. It would also be wetting her back, which looks dry to me.
Overall, I really like it. The expression on Air's face is lovely as well. As is her body language. Well done, really!
Second, the paragraph going with it is lovely, and I love the concept - but if possible, and unless it's done to accomplish a goal, I think you should stick to past tense throughout. There are some tense inconsistencies even within single sentences, and they really throw the flow off.
This is quite good, all around, actually
I think air is partially see through, right? It's visible when the outline of the background bushes continues into her shoulder... Perhaps you could keep everything above that line more transparent - otherwise people might simply view it as a mistake.
Air's hair around her ear seems a bit dark as well... Tiny detail, but it makes it look less like clouds, and less professional.
I like the addition of branches above, and the trees one the sides. I like how water they are in is utterly still - although that kind of works against the Water's motion of reaching out to air... So, perhaps consider some ripples in the water on Water's side?
I like the shortening of objects on the front plane on the work in the reflection - works good in terms of depth. However, it's inconsistent with how things are reflected in the background... Is this realistic?
Your fold are amazing (really wish I could do them like you
My only real complaint are the trees on the right of the work - on that little green island. It feels incomplete - they are as flat as their reflection, and even lighter than their reflection (the grass hangs down somewhat awkwardly too) - and that feels inconsistent with the rest of the work... so I'm not sure what exactly, but they need to be somehow fixed.
(Although, if they are not, it's still a magnificent drawing).
Last comment - brave choice with Water's hair... It looks like a waterfall - but also looks like a trick gone wrong in 3-D modeling... it feels like fiberglass, and not because it's shiny...
Um... The angle of her shoulders doesn't match up with how the water is propelled; and the point break of the water changing the path is too low. Also, even if her hair = water rushing down with immense speed, it wouldn't break in such perfect lines - it would spray apart instead... I'm sure there are pictures of Niagra falls that could explain this better than I.
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